Whereas, says the scribe
of the beautiful hand.
Whereas, shall the people answer.
The document could last forever
or until tomorrow. Surely
the sun will rise again.
You can track the progress
across any sky. Don’t
put your faith in night.
You are already counted
in the beginning.
Faces blur together.
Surely they are here.
Surely they have come.
Mountain and valley
will not matter. Whereas
important not to parody the prophets. Keep tone expansive, yet terse. Use, as much as possible, “the voice of command”. Actually, I think you’ve done this already. Are you sure you want to equivocate in lines 4 and 5. “Sun” deserves more than “the” in line 7. Contraction “Don’t” seems less forceful here than “Do NOT” (and I’m all about contractions). No “blur” in such a poem. I’d rather see them “press, bend, or fold.” Also, “put no faith in the night.” Transpose 13 and 14.